Hello friends... here is my self made poem, hope you will like it. looking forward for your kind feedbacks: -
That day will certainly come…
When darkness will go and stars will shine,
When everything will look calm and fine,
The day when there will be no insecurity,
Full of joy and hearts of purity,
Yeah that day will certainly come…..
The day when I will be something,
The day when impossible will nothing,
The day when u will be mine,
That day when I be blessed with divine,
Yeah that day will certainly come…….
The day when I won’t be scared of taking dreams,
When laugh will replace ma internal screams,
The day when you feel proud of me,
When smile will come on yours face, just because of mee,
Yeah that day will certainly come……..
I am trying to be, that I wanna be,
And one day I will be that, what I want to be,
GOD is with me I know from ma first breath,
And I will keep fighting till the last breath,
I promise that day will come,
That day will certainly come,
Yeah that day is coming soon…………………….!!!!
That day will certainly come…
When darkness will go and stars will shine,
When everything will look calm and fine,
The day when there will be no insecurity,
Full of joy and hearts of purity,
Yeah that day will certainly come…..
The day when I will be something,
The day when impossible will nothing,
The day when u will be mine,
That day when I be blessed with divine,
Yeah that day will certainly come…….
The day when I won’t be scared of taking dreams,
When laugh will replace ma internal screams,
The day when you feel proud of me,
When smile will come on yours face, just because of mee,
Yeah that day will certainly come……..
I am trying to be, that I wanna be,
And one day I will be that, what I want to be,
GOD is with me I know from ma first breath,
And I will keep fighting till the last breath,
I promise that day will come,
That day will certainly come,
Yeah that day is coming soon…………………….!!!!
In terms of a positive feedback,u ought to be a little formal while writing verses or poetry and give a bit attention to sentence structure as well...........u should always avoid using words viz ma,wanna, etc. in such kind of arts,if u don't mind me saying so..........well,nice attempt and wonderful concept.....
ReplyDelete@Vivek: Thanks a lot for your feedbacks and yeah from next time, i will keep all these points in my mind.
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